Strikethrough 27

Created Sat Oct 31 2020

I.
Through the shower window came
 
a patch of yellow light
 
trembling, flickering, dividing,
 
warmed
 
I thought of being held
 
in such a patch of light
 
It was not a dream of frustrated afternoons
 
this one was softer
 
sun landing on skin
 
waltzing its way to hair
 
to a nose pressed against an arm
 
and a wrist that will wake up numb.
 
II.
Through the shower window came
 
a patch of yellow light
 
trembling, flickering, dividing,
 
warmed
 
I thought of being held
 
in such a patch of light
 
 
It was not a dream of frustrated afternoons
 
this one was softer
 
sun landing on skin
 
waltzing its way to hair
 
to a nose pressed against an arm
 
and a wrist that will wake up numb.
 
omit solitary
 
 
 
insert sharp focus
insert harshness
 
omit sweaty, salty, sticky
 
 
 
insert communication
omit security
 
III.
Through the shower window
a patch of yellow light
 
trembling, flickering, dividing,
 
warmed
 
thought of being held
 
in such a of light
 
 
a dream of frustrated afternoons
 
this one was softer
 
sun landing on skin
 
waltzing its way to hair
 
a nose pressed against an arm
 
a wrist that will wake up numb.
 
IV.
Through the shower window
a patch of yellow light
 
trembling, flickering, dividing,
 
warmed
 
thought of being held
 
in such a of light
 
 
a dream of frustrated afternoons
 
this one was softer
 
sun landing on skin
 
waltzing its way to hair
 
a nose pressed against an arm
 
a wrist that will wake up numb.
 
omit big movements
 
 
 
insert clutter
 
 
omit fullness
 
 
 
 
 
 
V.
shower window
a patch of yellow light
trembling, flickering, dividing,
warmed
being held
in such a of light
 
a dream of afternoons
this one was softer
sun landing on skin
waltzing its way to hair
a nose pressed against an arm
a wrist that will wake up numb.

Author

Eliette C Instagram: @elliettechanezon

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